{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"60916214","dateCreated":"1353897677","smartDate":"Nov 25, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"ChloeTeichman","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/ChloeTeichman","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/rachel-digiacomo.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/60916214"},"dateDigested":1532129365,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"3DSP Feedback","description":"I love the symbolism that makes Dr. Raven similar to an actual raven. With each new journal written by the nurse, you do a great job of adding suspence to your story and adding to the curiosity of the reader.<br \/>\nI think you should go into more detail about why the nurses are not allowed to leave the Hospital, and how Dr. Raven came to have so much power? I was wondering about how the nurses had access to food, and where they slept if they are always working in the Hospital.<br \/>\nI agree with Sara's opinion that the nurse shouldn't be writing in her journal while she is trying to escape. Maybe she could be writing from a tree stump where she had stopped for a rest, to sleep, or to eat and drink water? She could also be writing in her journal after she has escaped to a nearby home with the window open, and she can still hear the yell of Dr. Raven?","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]},{"id":"60913884","dateCreated":"1353877899","smartDate":"Nov 25, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"stasar5855","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/stasar5855","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/rachel-digiacomo.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/60913884"},"dateDigested":1532129365,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Sara's Critique","description":"I really like the concept of these diary entries, Rachel! However there are a few things I would fix: <br \/>\n<br \/>\n- In the first entry you say Frei Fever is an &quot;always&quot; fatal disease. Is that true? I would take away the &quot;always&quot; bit.<br \/>\n-I really like the second entry, but the line that talks of Raven's &quot;desperate claws&quot; seems a bit contradictory. I love the use of bird imagery, but the &quot;desperate&quot; part doesn't fit with his character. <br \/>\n-In the last entry I wouldn't say the nurse is on the run. This is a bit nit-picky (you know how I am!), but maybe say she is getting ready to leave. It seems unlikely that she would be on the move writing a journal entry. Also, maybe instead of describing hearing someone coming to get her, you should just abruptly end it. Again- it just seems strange that she would be writing these things while in danger. And it would add to the mystery of it all!<br \/>\n<br \/>\nBut overall, AWESOME work, girl. I really like it :)","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"58577070","body":"All very good points! Thanks girl! :)","dateCreated":"1353881904","smartDate":"Nov 25, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"Rachel.DiGiacomo","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/Rachel.DiGiacomo","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/i\/user_none_lg.jpg"}}],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}